Date: Thu, 01 Jun 2000 23:56:51 -0700 (PDT)
| From: |
Eugene Eric Kim |
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Reply-To: unrev-II@egroups.com |
| To: | unrev-ii@egroups.com |
| Subject: | One paragraph summary |
One of the items on the agenda was coming up with a summary paragraph to help Pat Lincoln make his proposals to various government agencies. He asked for two brief paragraphs: a summary of the project, and a short description of our "first step."
The summary is something that Eric and Adam have tackled before on this list; there is also a summary on the Bootstrap Institute web site.
According to Pat, none of these are that applicable to his audience, which are government people. Unfortunately, Pat had to leave early, so we didn't have a chance to dissect some of these earlier attempts and come up with a more applicable paragraph.
I extracted the previous attempts, and put them on my web site at:
http://www.eekim.com/ohs/summaries.html
Please take a look, and feel free to make comments and take a shot at coming up with a better summary paragraph. I'd especially like to hear feedback from people who have experience making government proposals.
The second paragraph is something we talked about extensively at today's meeting; more details will be available when the minutes come out.
-Eugene
Eugene Eric Kim
eekim@eekim.com
http://www.eekim.com/
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